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one day i was walking on the street seeing two copuls kissing each other wondering
why she left me......... ?
i saw them walking together smiling and lughing wondering
why she left me.............?
remmembering the momment when she said that she love me and also wondering
why she left me.............?
i canot live my normal life because i am always wondering
why she lift  me..........?
my friends are advicing me to replace her say " she is just a girl" i said NO
why she left me........?
when i study i can t focuse because the only think that i can think of is
why she left me.................?
i want to konw girl why you left me .........?
did i do some thing wrong answer me.........?
i can t sleape without dreaming about her . my love i am still wondering
why you left me .........?
maybe am  ugly or maybe  im not your type and maybe  i said somthing that hurted you
please say  why you left me........?
who says that love cant hurt i wrong because it hurts me.
sombody help me some body help me but no one answer me
im crying in front of the window screaming
why you left me ..........?
i thought should i sousid  because the life is forcing me.........?
then i jumped from the window and say my last word
why you left me.......?
©2007-2009 ~millionpacks
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Author's Comments

it is a story of a teen who his girlefriend left him without telling him why?



i know it is full of mistakes but please comment and let me know if you lke it or not :please:

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:iconlockethehunter:
:( I think it's a flop...Fix the errors and I might like it a bit more

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I Rly Lk Fllng n Th Blnks
:iconlockethehunter:
Oh, and you might want to reduce the number of periods after each stanza...It hurts the eyes of the reader

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I Rly Lk Fllng n Th Blnks
:iconsedanxy:
:giggle: not bad for starters
i like it but fix the mistakes will ya ?
good job :clap:
oh....and ......she? :paranoid:

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This blade it feels so cold, baby hold me while, I'm shaking,
This knife has pierced my soul, I sit alone while, I'm shaking,
And yes I'll laugh out loud, with blind eyes I'm shaking...
:iconmillionpacks:
can you give me the mistakes
:iconmillionpacks:
thanx i will thank you so much
:iconairiesb:
its okay

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:sheepish: go "baaa"
:iconmillionpacks:
oh im happy you think so

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